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Help Critiquing my script

Postby firestorm » Mon Nov 10, 2014 7:23 pm

Hey everyone, I've been trying to get a critique for a 1st draft of my short screenplay script, Canvas. I've been looking around for a while and I really need help. If any of you want to read it please let me know. I'm trying to find out what to work on as far as plot, characters, story structure, description and clarity. It's an animated film script and it's only 11 pages. If any of you want to help please tell me your email or pm me your email so I can send it to you. I would really like the help and any help would be greatly appreciated. Love you guys!
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Re: Help Critiquing my script

Postby ClaecElric4God » Tue Nov 11, 2014 3:58 pm

Hey, firestorm. Sorry, I'm not much of a critic, or I'd offer to help you out. But I hope someone comes along who can give you some good critique and advice. I hope this goes well for you. Keep it up!
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Re: Help Critiquing my script

Postby firestorm » Wed Nov 12, 2014 6:57 am

Thanks claec I hope someone comes along because I really want to find out what I need to fix so I can work on my 2nd draft before Friday. Its due Friday.
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