Birdcatcher's Hymn

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Birdcatcher's Hymn

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Mon Sep 30, 2013 9:12 pm

someone must pluck the bird
from amidst the pricking thorns.
who will bind the wounds
from one saved from the rosebush?
better I a servant in my masters garden
then amongst the satraps of the perfumed court.

let me stand in the Unsullied presence
as one who has wept with the broken
let me live in the hollow of His hand
and bandage the fallen birds
consider me a pauper but bless me with mercy
lest I too with the roses, fade and dim
unburnished, unblemished by passing years
let my love speak for me, make mute my fears.
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Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

Postby Lynna » Tue Oct 01, 2013 1:54 pm

I like it :) It's really beautiful, and very hymn-like. I think it might just be my favourite of yours so far. I'm guessing that the capitalizations (Or lack of them) are intentional?
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Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Tue Oct 01, 2013 6:35 pm

yep.
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Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

Postby ClaecElric4God » Tue Oct 01, 2013 8:22 pm

Nice. It almost sounds like something I wrote once, especially those first few lines about binding wounds.
"as one who has wept with the broken" might be my favorite line here. Definitely stands out to me.
He hath shewed thee, O man, what is good; and what doth the Lord require of thee, but to do justly, and to love mercy, and to walk humbly with thy God? -Micah 6:8 KJV
They have shewed thee, O teen, what is good; and what doth the world require of thee, but to fit in, be wealthy, have good looks, and be rebellious? -Peer Pressure 1:1
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Re: Birdcatcher's Hymn

Postby PandaPop » Tue Oct 01, 2013 9:51 pm

Wow yeah this is hauntingly beautiful, I like it a lot.
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