MarcusMode (post: 1587318) wrote:Trust me, I've been working on the story for 4 years
They worked on Duke Nukem Forever for 14 years. Your point?
But mainly,ruki grew up sinless(no sin entered his life), that makes him the only worrior in the world that is known as the hero since young, never evil, and always looks for people in need: the kaibone-aruu hero holic soul.
So your hero is basically magic karate Jesus.
OK. I see certain issues arising from this. For one, how many times in the Bible did Jesus beat up sinners with super Cubone magic? Or with just His fists? Maybe it's just me, but if you're going to parallel Jesus with your character, have them act more like Jesus, not like Jesus-only-he-beats-up-the-bad-guys-and-there-are-kung-fu-magics-and-it's-totes-sweet-bro.
Now, I realize that there are plenty of characters out there with Messianic parallels, but the problem is that instead of making vague allusions or just reusing a pretty stock plot/character, you're trying to make a direct link between your character, who regularly lays magical smackdown on sinners, and Jesus, a pacifistic minster who taught that revenge isn't our tool to use. That's a pretty big mixed message, especially if you're targeting this to Christians/people about to become Christians.
All 12 of the seasons have excellent meanings.
12 seasons. So at 13 episodes a season (which seems to be standard in anime, which I assume is what you're going for), you've got 150+ episodes of Kung Fu Jesus Action Half-Hour planned out. Riveting!
Atria's right, aim a little higher! Anyone can make a Jesus figure or make veiled references to God/Christendom that only the people "in the know" will get, but it takes real skill to build a more realistic Christian character, one who's got some dirt on them that they have to work through, like real redemption story type work. And if you're aiming at conversion or encouragement for Christians, that's something people can relate to - I'm not perfect, but through God's grace, I'm doing the best I can. Nail those emotions, do that feeling realistically (because we've all been there), and you'll be doing more than a thousand simplistic Christ analogies ever could.
I apologize for coming across as really harsh in my criticism, but I guess I'm sick of seeing Christian art settle for mediocrity and constantly retreading "what sells" instead of making something more powerful, something closer to actual art. Whatever we're doing, we're doing it for God as His representatives, so I believe we should do it to the best of our abilities, and in art, Christendom has been failing that for years. You're no exception to that - you can do a lot better than a Dragon Ball ripoff with Jesus tacked onto it, trust me, so go out and do that instead! Murder the darling ideas you've been carrying for years, and make something better in their place.
We are loved even though we suck.
Psalms 37:37 (NHEB)
Mark the perfect man, and see the upright, for there is a future for the man of peace.